Deceived by heart,
Upon my mind,
Pushed away,
By you, I see,
No way inside,
The twisted maze,
No connection,
By you, I see,
Glared down,
Eyes of steal,
Tears seem weak,
By you, I see,
The truth has gone,
The penalties lie,
The way is clear,
By you, I see,
Love is see-through,
All mist evaporated,
Hidden away,
By you, I see
2 comments:
sheesh, tooooooo many, um, like, yeah, well, um, uh, err, you know, commas! you CAN carry a line down WITHOUT one you know!!! Still very good. As with other, not so sure about the rhythm!!! I LIKE IT THOUGH!!!
XxX-Kitties-XxX
yes, at the beginning the rythem is a bit patchy but then it begins to flow, i love that though, it is one of my favourites!!!
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