My poems all in one, usually ones about um...anything!
Tuesday, October 16, 2007
Sleep can never come to one so unsure.
Sleep can never come, To one who never knows, The secrets that may swarm, All around you, They are hiding from, Those as kind as you, Sleep can never come, To one so unsure.
mmmmm....i like the concept but think the rhytem could have had a little work, and maybe a bit longer and maybe a kind of plot as the theme of the poem should support it really well.
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mmmmm....i like the concept but think the rhytem could have had a little work, and maybe a bit longer and maybe a kind of plot as the theme of the poem should support it really well.
well done!!!
the rhythm was definitely good!
it was sooth and flowed really well.
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um....huh?
anyway can you please check out my new poem, i would really appreciate some feedback, thanks!
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